Objective: The students will complete a 1/2 essay.
1. All essays have been graded. Get them out.
2. Write 1/2 essay on Cat in the Rain
AP Essay Problems that Can Be Fixed
Next Time
1. FOCUS!!! Your paragraphs need clear Topic Sentences to
guide your thoughts.
2. No Universal Truth (Theme)
stated. Put it in the intro. BUT PROSE essays do not need one if the
prompt doesn’t as about “author’s purpose.”
3. State the devices that you’re going
to write about in your intro.
4. Intro too long. 2-3 sentences. Mention title, author and UT.
5. Writing: “the reader” or “the audience.” You are NOT part of the essay.
6. If you say that you are going to
write about imagery, tell what kind!
7. No need for citations and page
numbers (Mansfield 89)
8. Just saying “Mansfield uses diction
and syntax…” That just means he uses words and sentences. Well duh!!!!
Mansfield uses adjective diction and adjective syntax.
9. Quotes way too long. Integrate 3-7 word quotes into the flow of
your writing. Example: She “liked his dignity” and “the way he
wanted to serve her.”
10.
Writing
about tone without giving specific words that create it.
11.
Using
first person. Do not put yourself in the
paper. Try not to even say, “The
reader…”
12.
Slapping
the reader (me) in the face with a quote that is not introduced or provided
with context.
13.
Do
not mention things that are not part of the piece (The Brill Fish)
14.
Saying: This quote shows….
15.
_____________
diction.
16.
In
conclusion,
17.
NOT
KNOWING WHAT FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE IS…. Many
people wrote a paragraph on symbols, then started the next paragraph with,
“Hemingway uses figurative language.”
18.
You
have to speed up. That will take
practice.
19.
Mentioning
“rhetorical devices.” This is LAST YEAR!
20.
Analysis
without and textual evidence (quotes).
21.
Only
one body paragraph
22.
WRONG
FACTS
23.
Too
many devices in one paragraph. Lacks
focus. Let Topic Sentences guide your
writing.
24.
Too
much summary.
25.
Maybe
use a formula:
a. Thesis
b. Claim 1: Topic Sentence
1. Fact from poem
2. Text evidence
3. Comm
4. Comm
5. Fact
6. Text evidence
7. Comm
8. Comm