Tuesday, May 05, 2020

AP Lesson 30: Another Practice:

OK, make sure you look at the post from yesterday with the AP Info Updates if you are taking the test.

I had three kids write yesterday's essay.  That's OK.  If you didn't write it, at least read the prompt and the piece and think about what you would write about.

Today's AP Lesson looks like they are going to review the piece, kinda like I am going to do right now.  I am interested into seeing what they have to say, but I will have to watch it later this afternoon.  Lots to do today!

As I said yesterday, I read the dissented the prompt first.  I noticed key words that should be used in the essay:  complex relationship between sisters and family and society.  And literary elements.

Then I read the piece.  I was specifically looking for things that would stand out:  contrasts, shifts, and lit elements.

And they stood out right away:  The contrasts between the two sisters.

The shift at the end where one of them starts to change when she meets a man.

And a great symbol:  Remember:  Spring.  Or something blooming is always a sign.  She was described in a metaphor as a "vegetable" and then, as a blooming flower.  So this is obviously a coming of age story.

So what would i WRITE ABOUT?  Characterization and contrasts between the characters.  Then the shift where the one girl changes and blooms, comes to being and feeling like a woman.

I would get a 5 on this essay I am sure.

Today's lesson: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FwGEnIhbFpU&list=PLoGgviqq4845L7Yj9c1kkIfdskkaLOUzD&index=30

I will assign something maybe later.

OK they didn't assign anything.  So, I have a prompt here.  What I would do is set up a timer.  Read the prompt.  Dissect it.  Read the passage.  Then come up with a thesis and an outline.  Then stop the timer.  How much time do you have left?  Is that enough for a good essay?  I will give you 50 points for this.  Tomorrow, I will give a whole essay again.



Ozzy said...

that was one of my favorite pieces that I have ever read in my life

Briana Marquez said...
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Briana Marquez said...

Thesis: In the excerpt, Seamus Deane conveys the impact that the two novels had on him through the contrasting imagery and tone presented from each novel.

Body 1 : Paragraph one and two discusses the first novel which is intense and dramatic, the reader even inserts himself into the novel in a very dramatic way . Discuss the imagery of the heroine and emphasize that the image emits this dramatic tone in the words that are used to create it(ex. “Deep golden-brown eyes”)
Body 2:Paragraph three discussed the second novel which is described in a quite mundane way, lacking the added dramatic tone in its imagery. It was “simple”. The imagery was very matter of fact lacking the vividness of the first novel. Pull quotes from lines 43-60 that highlight the authors dull imagery.
Body 3:Final paragraph ties in the difference the novel of the essay about the “ordinary” Dutch novel and the Passionate rebellion depicted in the other novel. The contrast is tied in to show the deep impact of the first novel on the author. He uses unconventional or not “ordinary” language and creates emotional scenes in his mind just as the first novel did. He desires "endless possibilities" not the "ordinary".

took me almost 20 minutes, I had to reread the passage several times to grasp my argument and evidence :/

Juan said...

Thesis: As seen in the excerpt, Seamus Deane discusses The Shan Van Vocht and the essay his English teacher read aloud and their effects that they both had on him from early on. He uses romantic diction, selection of detail, and a first person narrative to convey the deep impacts those pieces of literature have had on him as a child.

Body 1: Romantic Diction - early on in the passage, he begins to describe the first piece; he describes the characters as having "deep golden-brown eyes" and the story as "exquisite" and having "endless possibilities" as he fantasizes about it. this introduces his yearning for more in life.

Body 2: Selection of Detail - in both the pieces he mentions, he focuses on one certain aspects of each of them. the beautiful, divine heroine in the first. the simplicity in the second. this reflects how Deane wants those aspects in his life as well; in his own life, he'd "never thought such stuff was worth writing about. It was ordinary life."

Body 3: First Person - lastly, he utilizes a first person perspective to further contrast his own, real life and the life he desires to have. He writes and imagines about these stories, wishing it were his own. He dislikes the mundaneness of his real life and instead, he "kept remembering that mother and son waiting in the Dutch interior of that essay."

took almost 20 minutes too, i felt like i had a good grip on what i wanted to say, not too bad of a passage either