Wednesday, April 22, 2020

AOP Lesson 21: Developing Claims

Hey all,

Late start today.  After a month of having no house cleaners, we decided to have it done by our awesome ladies.

So I was stuck in the garage with the dogs for three hours.

So here is today's lesson:

I will get back to you with an assignment after I am done watching.

I liked her first allusion to Tiger King! :)

OK here is the homework:  I picked a different prompt that the one that they have been using for three days.  I am bored with it and you guys need to see different things and think about other approaches.

So use this one:  The Prose piece about the engaged couple.

I like it and it's pretty easy, but not too easy.

Write a thesis:

Then outline an essay using the "Order of Paggage approach that they discussed.  That is the way that I would write an essay.  Chuck the text:  Beginning, Middle, End.

Then tell:  What it does, How it's done, them Why it's done.

Miss you all.  Put it in the comments below so that others can see your ideas.


Juan said...

Mavis Gallant's "The Other Paris" critiques the world revolving around Carol and the ill-advised messages that they impress into those residing within it in order to provide social commentary; through careful selection of detail regarding the reasons Carol and Howard got married, as well as a care-free syntax and melodramatic tone to outline the lack of romance and formality between both them and between their society and Gallant's.

Outline of Essay:
Paragraph 1 - The beginning of the passage sets the melodramatic tone that is kept throughout the story. It's done through the lack of excitement in the narrator's choice words and order of syntax and it is meant to reflect the lack of romance Carol and Howard have for each other.

Paragraph 2 - The middle of the passage explains Carol's perspective and her reasons of going through with such a marriage. It's done through selection of detail of how society drove her to be wed by Howard: many college lectures, the film industry, and even the "gravely [embarrassing]" discussion of their religion. This is meant to demonstrate how society can alter someone's life choices greatly and lead them into a life that is flat and unfulfilling.

Paragraph 3 - The passage ends with the statement of Howard's perspective on his engagement with Carol. It utilizes the melodramatic tone, again, to reflect the lackluster of his decisions about Carol. The fact he was warned by his sister and chose to marry her in order to avoid a life of loneliness reveals more sides of Gallant's social commentary: peer pressure and another example of how false images of self-fulfillment "deeply [move]" others into falling in its trap.

Briana Marquez said...

In this excerpt by Mavis Gallant, the antiromantic story of an engaged couple reveals through the narrative voice and characterization of both characters’ beliefs that marriage is built solely on circumstance and not love.

Body Paragraph 1: Beginning, first paragraph
The narrator opens with a characterization of Carol, as the typical woman with the romantic illusion of what her engagement would have looked like. In revealing what she would have imagined, the author is setting the stage that what she truly desires is that romance.

Body paragraph 2: Middle, second- fourth paragraph
The first shift is at the word actually in the second paragraph, the narrator is setting up a contrast between the dream engagement and what Carol received. The dream engagement was romantic and as the narrator revealed, Carol accepted with the belief that “in a short time she would be so old no one would ask her again.” The narrator characterizes Carol as clearly not in love with her fiance and as one that had come to believe that love was not “the true basis of happiness.” Each detail of her belief and how she fails to fall in love with him proves that the most perfect circumstances would never equate to true love.

Body paragraph 3: End, fifth and last paragraph
The final shift is into the characterization of Howard, the fiance. His background story reveals that he too was not in love and proposed out of fear that time would run out for him to find a “nice girl.”
It is the false pretense that marriage revolves solely around circumstances such as age and money that cause people such as Carol and Howard to jump into a marriage without love and end up unhappy and ironically(ironic in reference to Carols college lectures on marriage) divorced.

Mr. Warren said...

Juan that was great! I am not sure about carefree syntax. If I was you, don't delve too much into syntax on the test. Unless it's crazy obvious. It is just hard to write about. Warren

Mr. Warren said...

Bri. Nice! I think this wold be a great essay. Be sure that you both know what social commentary is in case you see that on the prompt.

Mr. Warren said...

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